j0sh1433
12-15-2007, 12:48 AM
This is the first chapter in a new fanfic that i am writing set during the time of the empire about a beginning smuggler and I'm looking for comments whether there positive or negative.
A Smuggler's Tale
Chapter 1:
Malvek Reeno was busy looking at the cargo in the hold of his ship, The Shameful Jewel, when the red emergency lights began to flash. "Now what?" Malvek yelled even though there was no one around to hear him. His short career as a smuggler had not been going too well. Out of the few runs he had done there had been many problems. He headed up to the cockpit hoping that nothing to serious was happening. Malvek franticly jumped into his pilots chair seeing that he was all too wrong and the reason for the emergency lights was the imperial cruiser that filled his viewport. Not another search party, he was thinking to himself taking the ship off of autopilot.
"This is the Imperial Cruiser, Emperor's Pride, shut down your engines now and prepare to be boarded for a search," exclaimed the captain.
"Yeah, I don't think I'm gonna do that," Malvek replied punching coordinates into his nav-computer. He was just about ready to jump to hyperspace. Just one more second. "There!" he yelled slamming his hand on the button and the last thing the Emperor's Pride saw was the stream of Malvek's engines.
The Shameful Jewel pulled out of hyperspace and all Malvek could see was the planet of Nar Shadda and the busy traffic of outgoing and incoming ships. Heading planetside, Malvek was sure glad that this run didn't turn out as bad as it could have when that imperial cruiser showed up. All that was left to do was dock at the port he was told to, let them unload the cargo, collect his credits and then go search for a new job.
It took about one standard hour for the cargo to be unloaded. Malvek collected his credits and then decided he would get some rest before he went out to the several bars in the area im search of a new job.
A Smuggler's Tale
Chapter 1:
Malvek Reeno was busy looking at the cargo in the hold of his ship, The Shameful Jewel, when the red emergency lights began to flash. "Now what?" Malvek yelled even though there was no one around to hear him. His short career as a smuggler had not been going too well. Out of the few runs he had done there had been many problems. He headed up to the cockpit hoping that nothing to serious was happening. Malvek franticly jumped into his pilots chair seeing that he was all too wrong and the reason for the emergency lights was the imperial cruiser that filled his viewport. Not another search party, he was thinking to himself taking the ship off of autopilot.
"This is the Imperial Cruiser, Emperor's Pride, shut down your engines now and prepare to be boarded for a search," exclaimed the captain.
"Yeah, I don't think I'm gonna do that," Malvek replied punching coordinates into his nav-computer. He was just about ready to jump to hyperspace. Just one more second. "There!" he yelled slamming his hand on the button and the last thing the Emperor's Pride saw was the stream of Malvek's engines.
The Shameful Jewel pulled out of hyperspace and all Malvek could see was the planet of Nar Shadda and the busy traffic of outgoing and incoming ships. Heading planetside, Malvek was sure glad that this run didn't turn out as bad as it could have when that imperial cruiser showed up. All that was left to do was dock at the port he was told to, let them unload the cargo, collect his credits and then go search for a new job.
It took about one standard hour for the cargo to be unloaded. Malvek collected his credits and then decided he would get some rest before he went out to the several bars in the area im search of a new job.