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j0sh1433
12-15-2007, 12:48 AM
This is the first chapter in a new fanfic that i am writing set during the time of the empire about a beginning smuggler and I'm looking for comments whether there positive or negative.

A Smuggler's Tale
Chapter 1:
Malvek Reeno was busy looking at the cargo in the hold of his ship, The Shameful Jewel, when the red emergency lights began to flash. "Now what?" Malvek yelled even though there was no one around to hear him. His short career as a smuggler had not been going too well. Out of the few runs he had done there had been many problems. He headed up to the cockpit hoping that nothing to serious was happening. Malvek franticly jumped into his pilots chair seeing that he was all too wrong and the reason for the emergency lights was the imperial cruiser that filled his viewport. Not another search party, he was thinking to himself taking the ship off of autopilot.

"This is the Imperial Cruiser, Emperor's Pride, shut down your engines now and prepare to be boarded for a search," exclaimed the captain.

"Yeah, I don't think I'm gonna do that," Malvek replied punching coordinates into his nav-computer. He was just about ready to jump to hyperspace. Just one more second. "There!" he yelled slamming his hand on the button and the last thing the Emperor's Pride saw was the stream of Malvek's engines.

The Shameful Jewel pulled out of hyperspace and all Malvek could see was the planet of Nar Shadda and the busy traffic of outgoing and incoming ships. Heading planetside, Malvek was sure glad that this run didn't turn out as bad as it could have when that imperial cruiser showed up. All that was left to do was dock at the port he was told to, let them unload the cargo, collect his credits and then go search for a new job.

It took about one standard hour for the cargo to be unloaded. Malvek collected his credits and then decided he would get some rest before he went out to the several bars in the area im search of a new job.

j0sh1433
12-15-2007, 04:31 PM
Need comments please because I'm not sure whether I'm going to continue or not.

Orandhite
12-17-2007, 01:44 PM
I like it. A good start. I would like to read some more. :yes:

sharyntyre
12-23-2007, 08:30 AM
I sense potenial here, it seems yee are lacking details, but then it's only a couple of paragraphs.

What species is Reeno, what was he carrying, who did he deliver it to? what sort of ship does he pilot?

please continue.

Darill Cyllem
01-02-2008, 03:19 PM
More would definitely be good :)
I like the ship name you picked out. We'll look forward to more stuff about Reeno in future installments.

j0sh1433
07-15-2008, 11:32 PM
It has been quite some time since i have been on here. I have finished re-writing chapter one of this fanfiction. It is longer and some more information of the main character of Malvek Reeno. Comments are welcome from all.

Chapter 1:


Malvek Reeno was busy looking at the cargo, a large container of assorted spices, in the hold of his ship, The Shameful Jewel, when the red emergency lights began to flash. "Now what?" Malvek yelled even though there was no one around to hear him. His short career as a smuggler had not been going too well. Out of the few runs he had done there had been many problems. As he headed up to the cockpit hoping that nothing to serious was happening, the rodian smuggler thought about how he had come to be in the profession. Malvek had always wanted to be a pilot but without formal training no one was willing to hire him and the empire frowned on employing alien species. So as soon as he could he bought passage on a shuttle to Nar Shadda where he became the apprentice of a small time smuggler. Now he was returning to the planet where his career began. Making it to the cockpit Malvek franticly jumped into his pilot’s chair seeing that he was all too wrong about the situation and the reason for the emergency lights was the imperial cruiser that filled his viewport. Not another search party, he was thinking to himself taking the ship off of autopilot.

"This is the Imperial Cruiser, Emperor's Pride, shut down your engines now and prepare to be boarded for a search," exclaimed the captain.

"Yeah, I don't think I'm going to do that," Malvek replied punching coordinates into his nav-computer. He was just about ready to jump to hyperspace. Just one more second. "There!" he yelled slamming his hand on the button and the last thing the Emperor's Pride saw was the stream of Malvek's engines.

The Shameful Jewel pulled out of hyperspace and all Malvek could see was the planet of Nar Shadda and the busy traffic of outgoing and incoming ships. Heading planetside, Malvek was sure glad that this run didn't turn out as bad as it could have when that imperial cruiser showed up. Now all Malvek had to do was dock at the bay his employer had instructed him to and everything else would be taken care of.


It took about one standard hour for the cargo to be unloaded. Malvek collected his credits and headed off to one of the bars that he used to be a regular at when he was just beginning his career. Arriving at his favorite bar Malvek noticed that many of his old time friends were not in attendance. Ordering a Corellian rum and sitting down Malvek pondered the thought of whether he should find out where his old friends are hanging out. Taking the final sip of his rum he decided he would go out in search of these old time buddies. Malvek got up from his seat, left a tip and walked out into the crowed streets of Nar Shadda.

Master_Kinnon
08-19-2008, 05:32 PM
I'd like to read more of this so please post whenever you get the chance!

Darill Cyllem
08-26-2008, 02:20 PM
There's lots more detail added with just a few more words - a really good re-draft, Josh. Hope you'll continue with this story.